For Me
"If I could have found words, I would have told her that nothing was more beautiful than the skin on her shoulders, nothing was softer than the curve of her breasts, nothing made my fingers twitch like the slope of her waist, and nothing made my body more aroused than the sight of her entirely naked, for me....
....It was the kiss that changed everything. Nothing was the same after this; I felt my mouth melting as I relaxed and just let myself experience, as I let her trust me but guide us both."
Feast
"The towel fell from her shoulders onto the bed but she didn't notice. Her heartbeat slowed, her lips were wet and parted as she stared at me. She examined me with a completely ravenous stare, shamelessly letting her eyes take in every line, every curve, and every ridge.
I stood before her, letting my eyes feast likewise, letting the image of her shaking body burn into my memory, feeling the smell of her sex completely envelop the humid air. I had never smelled her so aroused before and I felt at once annihilated and empowered with the knowledge that I did this to her.
She wants me. We can do this....
....I put my hand on her hair, watching a drop of water hang from a wet strand and fall onto her breast. The water was illuminated by the light in the room, and the droplet mesmerized me..."
Taste
"She smiled slightly, then, her eyes locked to mine, and leaned forward, running her tongue from the base of my length to the tip, sucking off the fluid there, moaning slightly.
I was frozen in place, my feet had sealed to the floor.
She parted her lips and I almost came at the sight of her pink tongue behind her small teeth. She lowered her mouth over my erection and I tested my strength, stilling my movements completely. It was unlike anything else. The feel of her tongue moving over my skin was everything the vision of her perfect mouth promised. Her mouth felt scalding against my flesh, slippery and humid and perfect. She looked up at me, completely unselfconscious, with her mouth spread around me and I realized, from the look in her eyes, that she would give me anything. I watched my erection disappear in her mouth, her small fist covering my base. She moved her hand and slowly took as much of me as she could."
Lost in the Feel
"I let my mouth wander over her skin, down her neck, to her collarbones, to her breasts where I hovered, tasting her on my lips, teasing her skin with my breath. I tested the strength of my touch on her flesh and ran my hand over the side of her breast, feeling the weight of it, pressing it in and up with my hand. I palmed it gently and squeezed as she hissed out a breath between her teeth. I lowered my hand to cup her, rolling her nipple between my fingers. I found myself lost in the feel of her, and all at once entirely understood the male fascination with breasts."
Inside
"I needed to feel her on my lips, needed to get closer to the source of the scent of Bella, purely Bella, warm and clean and deep. 'I just...' I mumbled, inching closer. 'I need...' I pressed my lips against her folds, kissing her chastely, licking my lips immediately. 'I wish so much I could...' taste you, I wanted to say. Lick you. Make you climax with my lips, my tongue, my entire face. There was nothing in the world I wanted more in that moment than to taste her sex. Not her blood, just her sex, just this. 'You smell so good.'
I stroked her with my fingers, bringing my thumb to stroke her clit, reaching down and pushing one, then two fingers inside Bella.
My mind reeled and my head dropped to her thigh as I watched my fingers move over her skin and disappear inside her.
Inside Bella. My Wife."
Move
"She looked at me and her face held an expression of such excitement and joy, it cracked my chest into a million, delicious pieces. 'Move in me, Edward...I need to feel you moving inside me.' Her voice was hoarse and it was the single most beautiful thing I had ever heard."
Blissful
"'God, baby,' I whispered. 'I didn't know'
She lay beneath me, looking positively blissful. I rolled off of her, feeling like a God as her form shook with satisfied exhaustion. I pulled her tiny, naked body against mine, kissing her hair, neck, shoulders.
'Bella,' I whispered.
'Mmmmm?' she mumbled, kissing my chest.
'I am so in love with you.'
There were no words beyond this."
Review by kassiah:
Finally I am able to read this. First can I just say Lola that I love you. And when I started reading LYLS and ALE, I didn't know you at all. And now, I have come to know and love you and it means so much to me. So thank you. And thank you for all that you put into your stories. And for this added insight into what is, in my opinion, one of the best fics I have ever read and certainly the best AU.
This is one of my favorite things ever: "Never before Bella had I touched myself with such insane need for release. Never before had I let my fantasies take shape with someone, let alone with my one. I prided myself on my control, I knew my control was immense, but with Bella it was too close to snapping." His one. It would have been easier for him if it weren't with Bella. I mean, I know tht he couldn't have been with anyone else but still. You summed it up so well. <3
Until I read LYLS, I didn't really think that Edward questioned how much Bella wanted him. But now, and especially after reading this, I know that he did. I loved this: "Say you’re ready. Tell me you want me. I won’t ever say no again." It was just so...like he needed reassurance and needed to give it to her too.
This is so powerful: "There was nothing in the world I wanted more in that moment than to taste her sex. Not her blood, just her sex, just this." because for sure, you would think his dominant thought would have been bloodlust. Always.
When he said "I didn't know" to her in LYLS, I really loved it. I loved that even though he didn't explain to Bella what he meant, and even when he did, he couldn't explain it very well. When he said this: "I didn’t know it could be like this. Didn’t know I could know everything she needed so instinctively." and when he said "God, oh God you’re better than anything else, better than anything I could imagine… I didn’t know…" It explained it as fully as he could, even though it was in his mind. And Lola, it is so beautiful.
And by the way, I fucking love it when he says "oh, please." just sayin'
So then when he is thinking about her blood, I was surprised by this: "However, instead of feeling the venom pool in the back of my mouth, I felt a pang of anxiety in my chest." No, surprised is the wrong word. I was proud of him. And I love you.
I love when he gets all primal and possessive. Really.
This sentence was very important, I think: "as soon as the smell of our lovemaking was overpowered by scents of the ocean, the trees, the night, I missed her acutely." The scent of them together grounds him and he misses it when it's gone. That was one reason that I didn't understand how he was able to leave and go to New Hampshire in ALE. I didn't ask for this outtake and frankly, didn't think about it, but I would be curious to see that from his POV. How did he get by, being apart from this for that many days?
That was amazing Lola. Thank you so, so much for writing it. ILY"
Great Quote via SpunkMe:
"Something primal and possessive ripped from me in that moment and I brought my fingers back to her flesh, sweeping them across her wet skin, pooling blood and the product of our lovemaking in the space between my fingertips, and bringing them again to my lips. With a growl I sucked my fingers, owning and craving her virginal blood. My blood. In that moment there was no greater truth: this blood belonged to me."
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